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Hubcap Hill

Mama Myrt and Daddy Dirt,
And little Baby Bill,
Lived a life of leisure,
High on Hubcap Hill.

Their house was made of Hudson hoods,
Arranged in clever ways.
Carpeted with floor mats,
It was something to amaze.

The windows were of safety glass,
Dirty and neglected.
But their furniture was wonderful,
Fingerhut protected.

Their yard was filled with rusted metal,
Waiting to be sold.
It was so surrealistic,
It was something to behold.

“Beware of Vicious Dog”,
Was the warning on the gate.
Those that didn’t heed it,
Eventually were ate.

The family wasn’t normal,
Kind of stupid I would say.
But they all seemed very happy,
In a melancholy way.

Baby Bill was thirty,
But he looked like seventeen.
His teeth were kind of crooked,
And also kind of green.

On his head he wore a hat,
A ladies’. . . . .from the ‘30s.
With sequins; it was unsurpassed’
Except for maybe Dirty’s.

Dirt, he wore a frilly cap,
With “DIRT” embroidered on it.
And Myrt was not to be outdone,
She wore a chartreuse bonnet.

Daddy Dirt was filthy,
He had motor oil hair.
He talked like Golmer Pyle,
But he walked like Fred Astaire.

Poetry in motion,
The way he moved his hips.
Aristocratic, to be sure,
Until he moved his lips.

Myrt was good to Daddy,
Off her back she’d give her shirt.
And all the neighbors loved her,
‘Cause she treated them like Dirt.

Dirt and Myrt and Billy,
I’m sure you would agree,
Were not the normal family,
But what should normal be?

   Copyright Tom Wilcox
   all rights reserved
A children's poem, one of several I read at a Barnes & Nobel reading.

Dedicated to Moma Myrt and Daddy Dirt, two real life neighbors I once had.

I hope you enjoy reading this as much as I did writing it.

Tom
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PeacefulSoul Sep 26, 2010
This sounds like it has Lord Alfred Tennyson's style to it,
who is second most quoted behind Shakespeare for his
daring and beautiful poetic rhyme schemes and lyrics.

You can definitely witness this in one of his works titled
“In Memoriam A.H.H.” He was a word weaver and
master at wordplay. It is worth a read sometime.

Although I like the poem, it is one of the most basic and foremost simplest forms of poetic form there is. That is not a bad thing; it is
in fact good practice for learning other forms, and you did a great
job keeping it traditional and so smooth.

It is a very playful, and in some areas, comical poem.
Even though this is a Children’s poem, as you proclaim,
I think some of the word use in few areas might be
too advanced for the average child.

Other than that, you did a great job in stitching this together.
This has been accepted to the Group!



Thank you for sharing.
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:icontomwilcox:
Thanks for your comment. Several of the references are indeed above most childrens knowledge. I guess that is a trend today, children's stories that play to the adults as well. That being said, I do somewhat imply that in the published book, "Hubcap Hill" [link] .

Thanks for accepting it into the Group.
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PeacefulSoul Sep 26, 2010
Ah, I see. Yeah, I never thought of it being a trend of today.
It sounds cool. You are very welcome for the well-deserved Feature.
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Chaosfive-55 Dec 29, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
AWESOME!!!:rofl:
...I'd be honored if you would read my poems and tell me what you think!
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:icontomwilcox:
:-) Thanks very much.

I read two of your poems and I like them both. :-) You write in a very structured style as I do. I made a couple of minor suggestions. :-)

Tom
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Ocalikecoca Jun 26, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
oh my :lmao: am just glad I found your poems in the morning...is always nice to have an uplifting start.
And I totaly agree with the closing line. Normality is always subjective.
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:icontomwilcox:
Thanks so much for the looks! I love getting comments on my poetry. Thanks for the feedback. :-)

Tom
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TheWhiteWalrus Mar 10, 2005   Photographer
That made me smile so big.
Tom, that was great.
That made my morning.

You should definitly do more like this.
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:icontomwilcox:
Thanks a lot! This was great fun to write. I would like to develop it into an illustrated children's story book.

Tom
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